Thursday, February 19, 2009

Revised - News Story #3: San Francisco neighborhood Upset

Gas Pipe Rupture Disturbs Hundreds of San Francisco Residents

A ruptured gas pipe disrupted the day for hundreds of people near Folsom and 11th. From about noon to 5 p.m., yesterday, over 100 people were forced to leave the area south of Market, including residents, business owners and their customers.

A PG&E employee said a private construction crew was trying to repair sewer lines when they severed a two-inch, high-pressure, underground gas pipe in the process. The mishap also forced traffic to a halt on the heavily traveled roads.

Crocker’s Lockers manager, Carlann Lauria grumbled, “Ask my customers. They were pretty irate.” The employees had to go outside police perimeter to collect payment checks from customers.

Wa-Ha-Ka restaurant manager, Samantha Feldman stated that her employees and patrons were forced to leave resulting in a loss of about $500 worth of business due to the abrupt shutdown.

1 comment:

  1. Your first sentence sounds more like a headline than a summary hard news lead. Make it all past tense; focus on what happened and the impact. Be more specific than "causes commotion."

    The rest works well.

    13/15

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