Friday, February 6, 2009

Revised - Leads 3

Four trains collided at 1:30 p.m. yesterday. Larry Chase, Amtrak spokesman, said that Amtrak and Conrail’s trains were headed northbound when the Conrails ran a stop sign leading to a collision between the trains.
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  1. AnonymousFebruary 8, 2009 at 9:32 PM

    Don't get cute with it ... just write a hard news lead. Check AP style on time.

    8/10

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 19, 2009 at 9:47 PM

    Better, but include where they collided in your opening sentence.
    8.5/10

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